An example of good characterization ...
In 1990, a young woman named Adeline lived in Florida. Adeline was
preparing her fancy meal that she would always make herself. Adeline’s kitchen was amazing, and it inspired her to put a lot of time and energy into her cooking. The kitchen was modern, with marble countertops and floors. It was very spacious, and she kept it very, very clean. Adeline liked to keep her house clean because she liked to stay active while she was home, and she had come to find that a clean living space permitted her to do all of the things she loved. She made breakfast for herself because she lived alone in a giant house. Even for breakfast she would put extra effort into her cooking. She would make eggs with basil, cinnamon toast with sugar, oatmeal, breakfast salads, and she enjoyed dancing while she cooked. Adeline liked to dance to jazz songs because it gave her a head start to a great day.
MANY OF YOUR STORIES STRUGGLE WITH CHARACTERIZATION (AND SETTING THE SCENE). IN THIS ONE PARAGRAPH, ONE OF YOUR PEERS HAS SUCCEEDED IN TEACHING ME SO MUCH ABOUT HER MC IN VERY LITTLE TIME. I HAVE BEEN GIVEN A REASON TO CARE ABOUT THIS CHARACTER. WITHOUT EVEN DESCRIBING HER HOME IN GREAT DETAIL, I CAN VISUALIZE A HOME FILLED WITH WARMTH AND MUSIC AND SUNLIGHT AND JOY -- AND I HAVE A REAL SENSE OF THE PERSON WHO OCCUPIES THAT SPACE.
THIS IS WHAT I AM TRYING TO GET YOU ALL TO DO WITH BOTH YOUR SETTING AND YOUR CHARACTER DESCRIPTIONS. THIS IS WHERE SO MANY OF YOU ARE FALLING SHORT.
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